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Post by kami on Sept 29, 2009 13:49:44 GMT -5
As a part of a writing course, we were given an assignment to tell a story in 50 words, no more, no less. Here's mine. Credit to MidnightManiac for coming up with the general idea  Raindrops on the rooftop. I walk among them, a giant on a field of diamonds.
The palace ahead is lit up. In the tower, the king sits safe and sound. The guards are nodding off in the quiet of the night.
I draw my blade. I can be quiet too. Comments? Good? Bad? Also, if you notice it having more or less than 50 words, let me know, Notepad won't tell me  |
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Post by melek ta'us on Sept 29, 2009 14:36:16 GMT -5
50 words
and its nice i just dont get the end musnt it be " I need to be quiet too" ?
As saying i can be quiet to is kinda useless. Like saying it doesnt matter if i make noise or not but i can be quiet too.
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Post by Zamac on Sept 29, 2009 15:27:11 GMT -5
Tbh thats pretty good for a story that has only 50 words (counted them). But I still prefer longer stories  (no offence). |
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Post by melek ta'us on Sept 29, 2009 15:51:37 GMT -5
my version of the story hehe. I did rly enjoy ur version just came up with this reading it Ashes fall from the sky. I walk among them, a punisher in a field of destruction.
The chip ahead is on fire. In the middle, the archon has been netted by me. The guards lay dead on a bed of ashes.
I draw my lance. I can be cruel too! |
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Post by lastdemon on Sept 29, 2009 18:32:59 GMT -5
awsome stories both kami and mel as u know i'm too bad writing and also i don't like write i prefere play the guitar, and use photoshop and make videos the write thing is not my best let's do the next: make 3 judges and a price then create a topic like "best image" or "best signature" and se how many want to participate just and idea if i'm not clear "PM2 on game |
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Post by melek ta'us on Sept 30, 2009 3:15:43 GMT -5
i like ur idea ld, but not everyone can or uses photoshop.
And i was thinking of making a new sig anyway. I just dont have to much spare time.
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Post by kami on Sept 30, 2009 4:15:58 GMT -5
my version of the story hehe. I did rly enjoy ur version just came up with this reading it Ashes fall down from the sky. I walk among them, a punisher in a field of destruction.
The chip ahead is on fire. In the middle, the archon is netted by me. The guards lay dead on a bed of ashes.
I draw my lance. I can be cruel too! Teehee, that's cool. Put it on your sig |
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Post by melek ta'us on Sept 30, 2009 5:22:44 GMT -5
lol kem i was planning to but might make a few changes hehe
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(no offence).